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Widow's Vengeance Chapter 9 - Nightmares

🕑 Added 2021-03-07 22:04:06 +0000 UTC

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letr1994

First of thanks for the chapter, it was interesting, especially the introduction to Knight, I have only heard the reference to nightmare once, and even then, they never really explained much, so I found the info at the end was very interesting, it helps to immerse more in the story. I have seen people complaining about the length of your chapters, and honestly I get it, but I believe you are doing a great job. While sometimes it can feel that the chapters of your story's are short, for me usually this one and Silver Prince, I find it's because how much I like reading it, and you always leave me wanting more, but considering your the number of your stories, and that you post almost everyday o every 2 day, I believe you are doing more than great length-posting ratio. Also, want to congratulate you in your attention to character development. I have find that there are a lot of authors out there that have great ideas but sometimes they're to ¿cross? (bruscos in spanish) with how they take the characters from where the start to how the want them to be in their stories, be it badass, sassy, brave, cunning, scheming, intelligent, strong etc... they just blast you with what can be great badass characters on the surface but without a depth, they are shallow, sacrificing the character development need for you to truly connect with the story, they are jus there and that's how they are. Maybe for fear that the story move to slow, I don't know, but they constantly push their stories to have constant accion. They fail in explaining what drives the character, what events molded they personality, how they became the way they are. By being so focus in how they want the characters to be, to fit in their plot, that sometimes it feel to forced, like something is missing, very unbelievable honestly, and then while they may have a great plot and good ideas, I often find it offputting, and becomes hard to read. But so far I feel that we can see the attention and effort yoy put in your story's and characters, giving depth at your story's, making it easier to relate to the characters. They feel real and not shallow, not matter how powerful they may be o what personality they may have, they don't feel like something is missing. Finaly the only advice I would give you, would before this story is trying to give the romantic interests of your main character a little more of development, give them more depth in who they are, and their place in your story beyond to support and pursue the main character. But honestly lately it feels that you are already doing that, just looking to Natasha here in comparison to Fleur&Tonks in Apex, o Fleur in Damage Raven, I feel that there's a difference, Natasha feel more complex more developed. I say this not to criticize you just to complain, but as feedback, hopefully something that can help you keep becoming better with each passing day. Anyway sorry for the long rant, great job, and Pura Vida from fan in Costa Rica.

Christian Jeffress

Thank you very much for another fantastic chapter, absolutely love the story and always wait in abated anticipation for the next release, once again, thank you very much.


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