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A New Potter - Chapter 6

🕑 Added 2024-08-20 16:09:00 +0000 UTC

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JO LP

I know this is 2 months old by now but I just started reading this story and I have noticed that as the story progresses you seem to forget some details that might contradict each other later on. For example when Harry was in the Leaky Cauldron you wrote that he had Hedwig with him, and she was happier that he stopped writing letters she would be unable to deliver anyway due to the fidelius. Yet when he arrived at Grimmauld Place, Ron and Hermione say they have been taking good care of her and Ron has some injuries to prove it. In the big scheme of things that's not a big deal, but the next example could be. Earlier, when Harry learnt about his relatives being kissed by the dementors, the Daily Prophet also explained that Umbridge had been arrested and would be put to trial because it was discovered she sent the dementor specifically to attack Harry. Yet now Harry is preparing to deal with Umbridge at school as if she was out and about. Either Harry forgot about the arrest, which doesn't make any sense since in-story it has not been even a day since he read that earlier, or you forgot that seemingly small detail. I'm sorry for essentially ranting but consistency is kind of a pet peeve of mine.

Scott

I thought it was HBP but you are correct. - Fixed

Chris

Didn't Harry "learn" occulmency in OotP not HBP?


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