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Old Pokemon fic ch2

🕑 Added 2023-08-04 00:18:13 +0000 UTC

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Primordial Vortex

Ash is facing Tobias and after a hard fight, defeats his Darkrai. After another fight, he defeats his latios. And then Tobias sends out a *3rd* legend, and at this point, Ash is PISSED and reaches for the pokeball on his necklace that he never actually uses in regular battles to teach him a lesson. Out pops shiny Rayquaza. Tobias quietly shits himself. And then ash, pissed beyond belief, tells rayquaza to mega evolve.

Kurtis Moxley

Tobias is one of the biggest fuck you an anime has pulled. Your not gonna win because I've got ledgendarys in my pocket.

Florian Müller

ah i so love good pokemon storys with a multi pairing thank you very much even if you are not working on it and its just aewsome that you give background and give it all a bit of sense if you ever work on it i would love to see dratini and milotic in ash's team they are just so cute i can't get enough of it and since ash already has dragon aura it would make sense to buff the team with more dragons because lets be honest most dragons are awesome 😊

Codeninja676 (Brian)

Loved this story so far and hey if you're looking for Inspiration I recommend looking in Royal Road there's some really good ones there and below are some of my favorites in no particular order: 1.The Type Specialist (The title says it all in terms of focus but it does interesting things with the setting by having more biodiversity in the Pokemon found in each region, starts in Hoenn moved to others later) 2.Pokemon Trainer Vicky(The world doesn't have Professor Oak so a lot of information is not shared making evolution methods and even the way people treat certain Pokemon a lot different, currently in hiatus though but worth a read of you need inspiration for a Kanto based fic) 3.Borne of Caution (More focused on the zoology of Pokemon and how the world operates in general, lots of good battles and character development though) 4. Borne of Desire (Anime logic is king in this one and the MC is using it to brute force his way to the top with he power of anime bullshit)

Primordial Vortex

I don't precisely remember if I intended it, but yeah that was Damien :kek:

Kaminoryu

I enjoyed the world building bits, like the evolution of the Pokédex to include the changes a lot of Pokémon entries have undergone. Also, the bit about the starters was inspired. Speaking of, was the rich brat who took the last Charmander Damien, Or just some random no name? You made me feel bad for the prospective trainers who got sent home in tears too, which is impressive, especially since we didn’t even see any of them on screen.

Jon

Glad you like it. If you’re looking for suggestions for Ash’s team then might I suggest Elekid/Electivire. It’s a good Electric type to replace Pikachu and it could have some kind of competitive relationship with Gible to be the top Pokémon on the team.

Primordial Vortex

Nope, our boy straight up punched his V-Card. LOL Dawn was always my fav. She just doesn't fit, sadly. Plus, she's 4 years younger, in story. It was meant to end in Sinnoh cuz fuck all those other plotlines and Tobias LOL How'd you like the light bits of world-building I had?

Primordial Vortex

Oooh what a nice one

Jon

I love this story, hopefully you get inspiration for it and can do more chapters for it. If you don’t have a name for Gible yet how about Dilong, the earth dragon from Chinese mythology?

Kaminoryu

Ok, now this one. I loved the bit with Ho Oh and Ash actually getting recognition for it. Even if that bit hasn’t been shown yet. I kind of want to see different characters’ reactions to it. Especially the champions like Steven and Lance. I do wonder if you’ve thought of a champion for Sinnoh given the hints that Cynthia has only been a trainer for a year or so. Also why exactly was Ash so ruffled and looking so happy after talking with Jenny and Joy hmm? :Lenny: While I doubt it was more than some making out at most it’s still interesting. Though I will admit to being sad about no May or Dawn in the pairing. Never been huge on Misty or Iris and I’m not as big on Serena as I once was, and I don’t know the Alola girls well enough to overly care about them. But I can live with it. At least Cynthia is still an option if you ever continue this.

Landrogar

I feel that sentiment. Most of the few good pokemon fanfics out there stop way too early. I hope you find the muse and motivation to continue this story one day.

Primordial Vortex

Yeah, I know.... I just haven't been able to get interested in pokemon in a looooong time

Kurtis Moxley

I know it ps marked as not actively being worked on but there are so few decent Pokemon fanfics out there. Most just stop barely past this forest doing nothing really different.


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