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Second Order

🕑 Added 2023-06-01 05:03:01 +0000 UTC

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Primordial Vortex

Killing a character and then going, "nah it was just a joke bro" to the point not a single fan in the world will believe a one piece character is ACTUALLY dead unless they see a corpse. And even then, we're no longer sure

3rddynasty

Ok so I stopped following one piece when ace made himself a donut. What does pulling an oda mean?

Lord Terra

Bro THE NAMES for izuku’s attacks that you chose are so damn good! I can’t wait force the rest of this story because you have me HOOKED. Great work as always dude.

Primordial Vortex

Yup. That's why I just removed myself from the equation. One of my friends kept reading and they abandoned all their MHA stuff and actively hates it now.

Codeninja676 (Brian)

I cannot stress this enough I'm so glad you shot canon in the face with extreme prejudice, like the current chapters are legit shit with good art that's it the only thing left is to enjoy the art everything else about the story can be put through a wood chipper and burned.

Kaminoryu

Nice to hear it. And yeah, the girl she was hugging in the movie when All Might saved her. I just figured they were sisters.

Primordial Vortex

Also this LOL

Primordial Vortex

It's one of the more fun concepts I had and it's at parts of canon other fics won't touch, AND it lets me air out my grievances so I'm totally happy to work on this. Not really huge on Zelda. Haven't actually played since Majora's Mask.

Primordial Vortex

Yeah, Dictator would totally be a cunt if it was a darker manga. As it is, just a monster. And in this, full cunt. So I said things were maybes for other girls. I might actually keep this one mono. Idk First order would NOT do anything for size differences, unless you're talking about an air clone. Cathy has a sister? News to me. lol And I definitely don't need any help there for her to survive. That bit is well planned.

Kaminoryu

I wouldn't hold my breath man. Even if PV played those games, he doesn't take commisions or requests that I know of. You'd have to get lucky and inspire his muse to have much of any hope.

Kaminoryu

Alright, reread on my computer and am ready to comment. First off I loved the chapter, even if it was a little darker than usual, it makes sense for the premise, not to mention a villain like Dictator with his quirk. What you intimated he did makes sense, even if I hate it. On a shipping note, damn do I feel bad for Ochako. I know you said he was going to wind up with Momo at least as well, though I don't remember who else specifically, but Ochako wasn't one of them. I am curious who else was showing signs of heartbreak. Tsuyu maybe. Wouldn't mind seeing Hagakure as well, girl needs more love. Maybe Ippan Josei? First Order could maybe help with any issues from the size difference. I am curious to see how things turn out regarding the villains as well, given I know you won't go anywhere near the shit that is canon. I can't wait to see how the meeting with Star and Stripe goes, not to mention how Potato gets his shit kicked in. Also, given Cathleen canonically has a sister, you could maybe bring her in as another hero to help give a reason for her to survive the encounter with Dusty.

Loghead101

Admittedly this wasn’t one of the snippets I expected to get another chapter. Not to say it isn’t good because this is a fun little chapter. Though I am now looking forward to you airing your grievances about the manga. I haven’t read anything about it since UA took to the sky and only heard little tidbits here and there. I’m in the same ballpark as you so looking forward to how you might change it. Also now that it finally came out. Think you might give a BOTW & TOTK crossover snippet a shot. I’m just imagining Izuku getting dropped off into Hyrule after the sludge villian incident, meets Link once he wakes up and becomes his squire for both games. Best boy learns everything from other best boy. Izuku comes back and for some reason has the sheikah slate, arm and infinite backpack. Imagine the USJ with all the crazy nonsense that can be done in those games. Surfing on rocks going the speed of sound, freezing the Nomu midcharge and building a giant death robot made out of super glue. Sounds fun. That’s it from me, always love getting something outta ya. Have a good one.


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