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4 - An Innocent Chat with the Queen

🕑 Added 2024-10-02 21:00:08 +0000 UTC

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BrokenOlive

Thanks for the chapter! Suggestions: “Misplaced?” That was an odd. How could a goddess lose a thing? -> “Misplaced?” That was odd. How could a goddess lose a thing? But she only shrugged. “Forewarned is forearmed. You know what will be com ing. Prepare yourself for it. And with that in mind, to your Quest.” -> A unnecessary paragraph space. “That is how it civilized realms handle such things,” -> “That is how the civilized realms handle such things,” She clucked at me disapprovingly, then with a flick of her finger, vanished my shame into who-knew-where. -> A unnecessary paragraph space. Between vanished and my. I can have more that one aim at once. -> I can have more than one aim at once.

Nathaniel Bartley Logee

Ha!

Ryan

Donum clan motto: Live fast, die several times.

Nathaniel Bartley Logee

Well... it isn't going to be the next chapter.

Ryan

She tasted like… The edge of a cliff. Time for a classic quest for the elixir of youth. I hope there’s some downtime soon where the crew can relax a bit, I’m feeling stressed just reading it.