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Hot Shit High Ch.2, Page 51(revision)
🕑 Added 2020-03-20 01:16:40 +0000 UTCSo I went to bed last night wondering why the sequence above felt a little off to me. Originally I wanted to draw Sharlene in a full backflip sequence, but when I tried this it didn't read well since the action needed to move leftward (away from Billy). Billy facing away from Sharlene on the page layout wasn't helping either. Instead, I decided to rearrange the panel positioning. Now we have Sharlene leaping up into a spotlight in the very first panel. After she slides her undies off we cut to Billy, reacting to her call. This leaves a little more transition space between the panels for Sharlene to strike her pose. Additionally I feel like these changes make the reading experience smoother from the previous page to this one.
I don't usually like making edits in post, but in this case I feel a bit better about this page, even though it didn't quite live up to the idea in my head... but what ever does, really?
Comments
Malaclypse
Definitely flows better. Great job.
Ben Tan
It's cool to see the decisions and differences. Thanks for posting them and keeping them up!
Whoriar
Suptle, but definitely better
TimParaxade
Admittedly, I prefer the new version of the page too! ^W^b
