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Chapter 51: Application

🕑 Added 2018-07-30 04:36:00 +0000 UTC

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Joseph Marcia

Whoops. Fixed and thank you.

Impasse

Typo: "Then, he flipped over, and the three of us were walling." pretty sure you meant falling here.

Joseph Marcia

I'm glad you like the awkward "flirting" I was doing my best to make it seem plausible to look at from either angle, and also completely unintentional. As for going with the DB? Probably not her best decision, but as Taylor said, fighting means they're up against a dragon, and running means that Raven is left in hot water in all likelihood (maybe I should add that in more explicitly). Beyond that, there's the feeling that I've been building up to of Taylor wanting to face her problems head on. And well, the Archmage? Yeah, there are plenty of schools of magic in the multiverse, but how many of them are run by a Planeswalker. She should still be giving you red flags though, that's basically Liliana's whole deal. All the red flags.

Tersin

I agree Raven and Taylor were adorable, and I can't wait to see where that goes. When Raven is the socially adept one only hilarity and adorkableness can follow. Especially as their flirting (that's what it was! You'll never convince me otherwise!) only works because their both oblivious. The second half of the chapter left me very confused though. Why did they go with the psychotic murderer? That seems like a terrible idea. Then there's the archmage. She only said a couple of sentences and already set off all my alarm bells. Especially that line about everybody calling her mistress. That's just creepy as hell. To the point where I'm yelling at my screen that there are other schools of magic in the multiverse! This one is clearly not worth it.

Joseph Marcia

I'm glad you found the scene with Raven good. I was worried that it would be a bit out of character, but at the same time, she's doing it for exactly the reason you described. Also, Raven may be starved for human contact herself, just a bit. Thanks for the corrections! Fixed.

esotericist

I was afraid the psychotic Dragonborn was coming up again soon, but I didn't anticipate her having an equally psychotic Planeswalker associate (mentor?). Also, Raven crawling into Taylor's lap was *adorable*. I mean, clearly with specific purpose (keeping Taylor grounded in at least mimicing mortality), but still incredibly adorable. Text errors: forcing me to my body -> missing word. Probably "forcing me to move my body" ? lear/n to look up -> learn to look up Shadomere -> Shadowmere “What is possible keeping it up?” -> probably meant to be 'is possibly', but you might consider 'can possibly be'


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