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Second Down - Chapter 21

🕑 Added 2024-12-21 16:00:08 +0000 UTC

Comments

Chester Goetzinger

Yes they lost, but they showed that they could score.

Dwight Palmer

I'm confused. I don't remember them wining ay games. Whyatt was the last game and they lost. Maybe I'd better read this chapter

Chester Goetzinger

Thank, much better.

Travis Starnes

It's back. I was fixing a section and missed the previous scene. It should be complete now.

Travis Starnes

It's back. I was editing it because I left some of my scene outline in the second half somehow (there was a big not really clear block of text) and when I removed it, I forgot the game scene before it.

Chester Goetzinger

Yes, it was at the start of this chapter. A well described event that they won. Coach even allowed 3 long passes. Two completions and one on the money but dropped.

David Howe

I could have sworn that the next (away) game was in this chapter. Either there was an edit, or I'm losing my mind (entirely possible). :)

Chester Goetzinger

Lost the game. Description of the game that was on line earlier was better than the pervious ones. I enjoy this do over

David Howe

What I'm liking the most about this story is that it's more realistic than most do-overs. The need to argue with his dad, for example. Similarly, the need to play the game his coach's way and the frustration factor while slowly... ever so slowly... getting his coach to trust both is decision-making and his skills. Yeah, it's moving a bit more slowly than I'd like, but I can live with that, and things are starting to come together.


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