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Second Down - Chapter 7

🕑 Added 2024-11-02 14:00:03 +0000 UTC

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Phil

Nevertheless, the scene had a nice flow, and you made your point about how Elijah's friends were sabotaging the rest of the team for their own selfish interests. So, are you going to bring the team sabotage to a fast conclusion or will this be an ongoing theme through most of the season???? I will just have to wait and see ;-)

Travis Starnes

It really is. I knew this one would get it. I'm not a sports person, so I know I'm going to make errors any time I write a sports scene, no matter how much research and prep I do.

Phil

I am sure it is a source of unending fascination to you on what passages provoke a reader comment and which passages sail through without one.

Travis Starnes

I edited it to be more clear, but it meant that Monterey's kick returner caught the ball at their two-yard line and got the ball to the thirty-five yard line before he was brought down. (got meant caught the kick off)

Brett Grayson

"We got the kickoff and pick up some field position, setting up for another passing play." There was no score by either team so how was there a "kick-off"? A kickoff is a method of starting a drive in gridiron football. Additionally, it may refer to a kickoff time, the scheduled time of the first kickoff of a game. Typically, a kickoff consists of one team – the "kicking team" – kicking the ball to the opposing team – the "receiving team". The receiving team is then entitled to return the ball, i.e., attempt to advance it towards the kicking team's end zone, until the player with the ball is tackled by the kicking team, goes out of bounds, scores a touchdown, or the play is otherwise ruled dead. Kickoffs take place at the start of each half of play, the beginning of overtime in some overtime formats, and after scoring plays. Do mean Blake's team was the receiving team after a punt or that his team punted?

Brett Grayson

Kickoff to start game? How does Monterey start the game on the two-yard line? There has to be some kind of background relating to that starting point that is missing. After the half, since Monterey received to start the first half, how was Monterey receiving again to start the 2nd half?

D.J. Clarke

Suggestion. May not be grammatically correct (I almost flunked grade 12 English way back when )but it reads better. Scores 7-0 not seven to zero. Most people would say seven-nothing. I played/read a lot of sports, maybe sports writers have their own verbiage. Also saw this before not in this series. high score always goes first, we were down 14-7, instead of down 7-14. Then again you are the writer I am just the reader and I enjoy your writing.


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