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Second Down - Chapter 16

🕑 Added 2024-12-08 16:00:05 +0000 UTC

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Travis Starnes

Good notes. I got confused on which was ours and which was theirs.

D.J. Clarke

Yep from yer own 35 you ain’t reel close to the end zone… well unless you have Josh Allen’s arm..😂

Chester Goetzinger

Would have been nice to read what happened on the previous blitz.

Chester Goetzinger

Two paragraphs above the one Tobias pointed out, it should say “into their side of the Field”

Tobias

Another good chapter, but i noticed what seemed to be a small error in one of the paragraphs recounting the actual game. You wrote: "With two minutes left, we were second and seven from our thirty-five. The closer they got to the endzone, the more aggressive they started getting. They’d already blitzed once, and I was waiting for it to happen again." The paragraph would make more sense and be a bit less confusing if you just make two small changes, which i've highlighted with _ _ : "With two minutes left, we were second and seven from _their_ thirty-five. The closer _we_ got to the endzone, the more aggressive they started getting. They’d already blitzed once, and I was waiting for it to happen again.


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