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[ 31 ] Let the Hunt Begin

🕑 Added 2024-12-08 18:20:01 +0000 UTC

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Edgar Fig

Hey Nomad, thanks for the comment. With Ellie she's 14 now, so I kind of wanted to play with teenage changes and angst. I think I probably made the childhood arc too fast and this stuff doesn't come through properly. As for Kal, maybe he needs a few edits or something here and there. I'd have to do another reread.

Nomad

I like the series so far. A few things. 1: Ellie has a very grating personality. I don’t know where it came from bc she wasn’t like that when she was younger. 2: Arix constantly winking at Kal is kinda weird. It’s supposed to be a secret so there’s no need to continuously bring up the fact that it is a secret. 3: Kal is supposed to be like 40 years old but he often acts w the ignorance and innocence of a child and I don’t understand that. If he was said to be 17 or even 20 when he was reincarnated it’d make more sense. But being 40 and making the mistakes he’s made is kinda wild.


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