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Rattata Chapter 50: Negotiations done

🕑 Added 2025-01-29 03:00:03 +0000 UTC

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bor902

Pet Peeve for pokemon fics is when the Protag can talk to the Pokemon, jesus. Glad you liked the arc, I think the Pokemon fic might potentially be better than Harry Evans in a way, because if you remember Harry Evans was my first fic after taking a 2 year hiatus of writing, so the Pokemon one is me being back in shape and also learning some new things. I feel my next original fic will also be better than the Video Game cultivator one, just more practice (foreshadowing)

bor902

Love the idea that Joey essentially roofied Oak with alcohol to make him more compliant, now that's what you call street smarts

Pope Yoda I

'Did I just get rolled by a toddler?' thought as mildly inebriated Professor Oak as he took another large sip of his spiked 'Johto'd Up' tea, unknowingly paying tribute to an equivalent derogatory term from another world for another nation of alcoholics. 'Like taking candy from a halfwit.' Though she heard the thought, Sabrina would remain too unworldly to connect the bottle of hooch slipping back into MCs pocket with Professor Oak's increasing pliability.

Green0Photon

This might actually be my favorite of your ongoing fics, as much as I love the other two. Every chapter has progress with plot and characterization and feels really tightly written. The jokey nature of the protag both doesn't go as overboard in some way I can't describe as the others, yet even despite that, it fits in so much better. This fic feels like it has a very diverse cast of characters, and notably, the protag isn't a loner. So it's also more interesting to read and see Joey do stuff. Plus we got the extra characters in his Pokemon, but it doesn't feel like it goes overboard like some Pokemon fics do. The whole last mini arc of chapters was incredibly well written (setting aside that what was before that was also very well written), and we have this chapter capping it off just perfectly. Solving the sponsorship problem beautifully, demonstrating Sabrina's character, and the amazing callback to the Pokemon Institute in such a brilliant way. Where it's another joke of Joey being a reincarnate with experience, but it also makes just so much sense. Perfectly comical, but also do obviously what would happen. And shows his character so well! In a way that's not just consistent, but also doesn't do the thing of semi-fourth wall breaks with a slight personality change for certain jokes, which can sometimes happen in comedic writing. Just so fucking perfectly written. This chapter didn't feel short, because the way you wrote it was tightly written to contain a lot of content with a lot of meaning in each word. Just so damn perfect. Yeah I love your other fics too, especially the HP one. But I feel like this one has just been consistently a cut above for a long time. Where this is the one I'm seriously jumping to go read on release, even more so than the HP one. As usual, very excited for more! Thank you for the amazing chapter!


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