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Game of Thrones story idea Chapter 1

🕑 Added 2024-08-30 02:00:03 +0000 UTC

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gochicus

it's to early to discuss quality of the story, but i like this particuar fandom, so i hope to see more chapters of this

bananaphone

He is off to war, as close to dead as it gets for a random char in ASOIAF without it being necessary enough for the main plot to be gruelly described in detail.

bananaphone

I enjoy it so far. "will his people reject the lord dumbling and will he be seated next to hodor? Or will he prove himself in the war as more usefull than a raven? Stay tuned!"

DiscoT

Some characteristics of it sure. It's a tough read when it's too heavy and most importantly, a majority of people can't relate to it.

bor902

Yeah, those names are a bit annoying

bor902

That's definitely what people think

bor902

Well, let's not say no instinctually to some autism representation in the fanfic space lmao

bor902

They can't all be bangers

Gremlin Jack

Entertaining, I like the idea of the SI completely flubbing his PR but winning people over anyway for the cute. But there were some typos, the most confusing one being "Rickard Stark", who had just died, as opposed to Rickard Karstark. Seriously though, that's quite the failure of imagination for whoever named these people.

MagicWafflez

... idk, will people think he's smart or that he's brain damaged standing around with his eyes closed all the friggen time... I feel like most people are instead going to think he's kind of slow... ^_^;

DiscoT

Your Harrion comes across as too clinical and frankly somewhat autistic. I like the base idea of an SI into Karstark but the character is too alike ur other mcs.

Ano

Writings a bit off, kind of a weird narrative bit, I prefer your other offerings. I’m also not certain what the point is in creating an SI where the protagonist has nothing to set him apart. You can just remove that bit and make it a regular oc helmed fic.

bor902

You can avoid war, but war finds you

bor902

Six years old

bor902

Wow, this is how you treat me huh? Well, they can't all be bangers to be fair and I really don't think GoT is my strong suit. Should have killed him end of the chapter actually... That's a good idea. Sticking true to source material.

bor902

hehe hoho, reincarnated I have been, silly things I shall do. You can have one innovation. I for example know fairly well how a printing press works. But having someone who knows how to make, glass, guns, crop rotation etc is a bit dumb Would be funny though, last paragraph. "I got reincarnated into a shitty fantasy world so I try to kill myself to get a better roll, but circumstances keep preventing me from dying!"

C&C

Respect for going against the grain and not granting your protagonist encyclopedic knowledge to dominate the world with. When i read that this was a 'pen over sword' kinda fic, i certainly expected some 'innovations'. A route like this was a pleasant surprise The protagonist also won me over quickly. Behind the serious demeanor and actions lies somewhat of a silly guy (if i'm reading him correctly), which made following his actions and seeing his internal thoughts fun for me. Also, i will speak in defense of some of the 'innovations' i've seen authors have their protagonists come up with! I'd argue that a lot of people would actually be able to bring quite a bit over depending on their educational/cultural background. Hell, my family actually has a background in glassblowing (you would need to reincarnate in a position of authority to not die a most painful death tho...) In any case, looking forward to more if this story continues. For the most part i hope our protagonist gains some kind of motive besides basic survival. Mostly because basic survival isn't all that great of a reward in his position (imo). The great privilege of being the lord of some kind of frozen wasteland close to the ice zombies, married to some rando he'll probably dislike. Wowie. At least he'll enjoy his job.... right? Honestly, i'd probably fuck off to Essos the moment i could pull off the trip. Less responsibilities, less ice zombies, less need to live in a place that's fucking frozen all the time. Hell, maybe be with someone you choose! And if i die? Well, already got a random reincarnation once. Who knows, maybe the next place would have working toilets

Green0Photon

> This fic is my response to an annoying trend that I see in GoT fanfiction, which is the belief that a SI would have enough scientific knowledge to actually innovate reasonably. Unfortunately, I feel like the counter trend is also a bit overdone. This fic ends up in a weird halfway state between where it's playing that counter narrative straight, but also has some knowledge of the counter narrative. NGL, the worst is that there's still the same "you're all savages whereas I'm from a superior society, but I know to treat savages with kindness" vibe, where it's the same thing that's wrong with the uplift fics. And it's hard to tell if it's just unreliable narration or you playing it straight. A lot of that is gonna be the worst only because it's one chapter though. It was actually so silly with him constantly thinking of the mastermind plans like all the worst kinds of fics, that I thought we'd have a Game of Thrones moment where he just fucking dies at the end of the chapter or something. I do still like the fic, to be clear. It's very well written. Just lacks that original punch that you're able to have in literally everything else you do. I mean, it has some. But it's doing the thing where the author has unreliable narration where paranoid readers feel like it's just bad writing, when the weird bits are deliberate. I mean, I hope they're deliberate... Anyway, haven't seen a Karstark SI. Especially like this. Bobby B's war fics are also rare. So if this was a new fic by another author, insdread of you with 3 things on their plate already, I'd love to see more. But instead... *Cracks whip* back to your other fics! (Lmaooooooo)

Mrsean22

Karstark huh? Honestly a pretty powerful house in the North. Add in being the heir? He got some power once he grows up. But yeah he's starting to learn you can't avoid fighting in a war. Well he's not fighting because six but the message is the same. Looking forward to seeing where Harrison goes.

Austin

Might need to kill his dad to keep alive at this point tbh but how old is he now?


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