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Chapter 121 - To Grandpa

🕑 Added 2024-03-20 14:59:33 +0000 UTC

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Wes Brown

What do you mean "somewhat impulsive actions"? In order for them to be less impulsive he'd have to have a condition....or be an actual child. Which is what I thought he was when because Sell didn't want to go for a make out sesh in the carriage he decided he was owed a kiss and had to kiss her in broad daylight in front of the multiple people (probably) spying on them. " What does she expect me to do if we can’t ride in the carriage together?" How about not totally mess things up for the both of you because you have zero self control now, despite all the discipline you exhibited before forming your core? Huh? Where did that go? The author spent multiple chapter where he talked about how it was important for them to not be seen as dating because she's betroved to a super powerful guy already and they aren't in a position to do anything about it yet.... but noooope he's gonna kisser her because he wants to so " it would be worth it" even if they were discovered. So confusing.

Wes Brown

@Rekhyt 4.3 out of 10 is my rating for the chapter. Not the number of pills he has left. How would 4. 3 ths of a pill even work. That's hilarious that you thought that. Weren't you just trying to give me a hard time for supposedly not understanding the story and how its " not that difficult to follow" or whatever

Rekhyt

Also, I'm pretty sure it's to set up some event. Looking at the whole picture, I doubt he'll have 5 years of smooth sailing at the academy with Sell. Especially with him just being far more powerful than the other students. There's no suspense in that. I imagine Sell will be pulled out if the academy way earlier than anticipated. Perhaps in part because of Adion's somewhat impulsive actions.

Rekhyt

@Wes Brown. You sure you didn't get this wrong? There were 5 fire pills. 1 for himself, 3 for his family. Last 1 will definitely be given to Sell. It was alluded to in earlier chapters. Him promising her sth valuable. Her mentioning she needs better control. Her importance to the story in relation to alluded end of earlier ages. (Fire wiping them out and hence ending the Age of .. Mysteries?) And her needing power to avoid being married to. It's clear he'll give her the pill.

Wes Brown

4.3 out of 10, Adion keeps making extremely immature knee-jerk choices. Other people have brought it up in the past,but it's becoming more of a thing. Kissing Sell when everybody and their brother is already spying on them? Without any really good justifiable reason other than, " it'll be fine and i want to" just rubs me wrong. Same for his next meeting with the soulmage guy or giving his grandfather that last pill that he should arguable give to Sell, very blasie. If you're going to write him making these choices you should have believable reasons. I still hardly believe the reason given for revealing his true power level at the last second after hammering over again and again how he is planning on keeping it hidden. If its a choice your going to make for the story that's fine, but readers need to be able to buy in and suspend their disbelief, I am having a hard time doing that. You make a big deal out of whatever it is, people being suspicious or hiding their relationship or his core strength, then he reveals whatever it is ( his core strength in this case) and their doesn't seem to be any consequences or contingency plans. I feel like, don't build it up into a problem and then make it something that has no consequences when he breaks whatever the perceived rule he's set for himself. Why set the rule and make it a big deal for,( in the case of his power level, half of a book) if it doesn't matter when he changes his mind and reveals whatever it is. For so long you've written about how he needs to hide his core strength, he cant draw to much attwntion to himself, he has enemies, if people found out he has no way of stoppi g strongwr people from taki g advantage of him. Now one brief conversation withbhis grandfather and revealing his core strenght " will probably be a good thing"? It just doesntmake sense. Building up plot points to just ignore and discard them is bad writing.

Mr. Iron

I read it as him giving the pill to Sell.

Kbzzy

He’s gonna give a pill to the elder to keep his secret? If so isn’t fire a waste? Sell could use that

Anthony John

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