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Chapter 116 - Fights

🕑 Added 2024-03-13 16:05:26 +0000 UTC

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Kyrre Göran

This. The story is so cool, but the hmms is real jarring everytime. And it happening more and more

Wes Brown

Just saw this after writing my comment. Glad someone else agrees with me. " Mm" isn't a word. It's a consonant. It's poor form the way the author keeps over using it, instead of actually writing out a complete sentence. It's been annoying in the past, this chapter was over kill.

Wes Brown

You need to stop having your charaters say "Mm". It's not a word first and foremost. This chapter you have used it to start a sentence no less than 8 times. It's lazy writing. I've been reading for over 25 years... never have I seen and author use " Mm" instead of " yes, ok, alright, sure, absolutely" or a host of other options. If you want to be taken seriously as a writer you need to limit how often you do this.

John O'Connor

One thing - don’t people in this world use the word “yes”? I’m getting a bit tired of “mm” from everyone.

Kbzzy

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Raymond Mouton

Ok, so that is better. I’m curious as to what’s next… Ah, the anticipation…

Ahppy

It wasn’t accidental. It was intentional to show his aura’s real strength.

WiseBison

So the final part of the chapter seemed to have unintentionally resulted in a misunderstanding from a lot of people (my mistake, it's hard to view the story from outside at times) So I changed Adion's final sentence to make it clear that he revealed his aura intentionally. (His motivation for doing so will be made clear in the next chapter, though.)

Raymond Mouton

Honestly the whole schtick with the MC unintentionally revealing secrets to close friends etc, is more than somewhat belabored at this point, but this is beyond that, by a significant margin. Here the MC is shown to F’up his aura control, which he has spent years improving/perfecting, to a large audience, in which the consequences of him doing so would preclude his attending the school this whole arc of the story is set in… Frankly, this “twist” makes little to no sense to me, and if the story continues in this vein, I am not sure personally, if I will continue to enjoy this. For the mean-time I will continue to give the author the benefit of the doubt, because the story has been good so far, but, I’ll just have to wait and see… The author, seems to have made an adjustment, which makes this comment mostly moot. Still curious as to what’s next…

Somebody

I didn't expect it at all, he's going to have so many problems

Eduard Marciuc

I loved this chapter, but I do have a tiny criticism. What happened for him to reveal his aura unintentionally? Because we have seen him in way more action packed situations where he hadn't revealed his aura, so it can't be adrenalin. I can only think it was outside intervention but I don't think anyone can display another person's aura right? It just seems a bit like a plot hole to display his skills unless there is a good reason

Anthony John

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