Leakoo
Kyfe from patreon
Kyfe patreon

Chapter 116 - Price of Arrogance

🕑 Added 2022-09-08 21:46:16 +0000 UTC

Comments

Alex

@leonard Marchant I agree. The military and command stuff is stuff that I enjoy most about this story. Truth is, I don't necessarily care if their actions would make sense on earth. It's a different world with a lot of nepotism. And it's a world with barely any human on human conflict. At least not large scale. Beasts don't use tactics. And personal power is more important (or can at least offset) than command skill. That wouldn't happen on earth because everyone is roughly the same strength. (at least compared to their realm filled with magic and levels)

Luna

Yeah I much prefer showing > telling. Telling makes me stop reading

Lommel

Maybe people are concerned it turns into "Ten Realms" (Michael Chatfield). Started great with wonderful MC pair, but then got lost in powerpoint board meetings kingdom building and army building and there is less and less adventure and the MC becomes a side character in their own story. So far I very much like what I see here though. Including this arc. Much better than watching the MC sitting through lessons in school. The only question I had, a little bit, was why volunteers would go on marching against an overwhelmingly large enemy force, but most of that can be explained by them simply not knowing. What MC found while scouting was only known to the major and the few people who heard the report, and the rest of the volunteer battalion simply did not have that information until they stood right in front of the combined enemy armies.

Leonard Marchant

@John Maybe it's because you're a former soldier that fleshing out the command stuff seems unnecessary? Personally, ever since the first arc it's been one of the highlights of the story for me.

Kyfe

You complain about the dialogue saying I should have just said what Reivyn did, but more people would just complain that I told you instead of fleshed it out through dialogue. You can't believe that people could be incompetent and say you were a soldier, and yet I have more experience and stories of incompetent people than competent in my time in the service, and history is full of examples of it. You assume the military, I guess just because, should be competent at war, even though I have consistently painted a picture of a world where war between humans is very, very rare, and they're used to fighting monsters. The Major is used to having his troops be able to overcome extremely vast odds from monsters because of the difference in Stats and Skills. This is arrogance and a misapplocation of experience. Just because you can't see it doesn't mean I'm going to change it. It is completely believable, and I just flat out disagree with your criticism. I'm not going to spell every little thing out for the readers. You guys have to be able to read between the lines and extrapolate information based on the world of the story, not our world. Tl;Dr I don't agree even a little with you, and your opinion is in the minority from the other comments I've seen.

Frardowin

Exactly

John Koor

I'll be very glad once we move past this arc. The dialogue interactions with planning/directing the unit are completely unnecessary and just slow down the story. Instead of writing out a conversation of him telling the unit unit/officers what to do, it could have just been summed up by a sentence saying what he did. Instead we get an awkwardly wooden scene that takes many paragraphs to do the same thing. It's not like we really need to take time to flesh out the personnel in the unit, since they are highly unlikely to continue along with him after this arc. And if some of them are going to continue on, we haven't seen anything that really sets them apart from the rest. The exception being the brawler dude, and the first officer to start following Reivyn. I've found myself skimming a lot of the military unit stuff since it's so cliche and meant to make Reivyn look like a god amongst morons. I thought there was actually some twist to the stupidity and that the Major was intentionally feeding his army to enemy slavers, but then it shows the command wiped out. Sure, his empty horse could just be delaying the reveal of the Major's complicity, but we'll see. As a former soldier, I get where the author is going with disparaging the command, but realistically that happens at only a few points of failure. A chain of command with every level of command being an absolute moron would not realistically happen unless the kingdom had intentionally filled the army with every undesirable person and sent them off to die. A kingdom that only has idiots would not last long.


More Creators