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Chapter 96 - Deep Within

🕑 Added 2022-08-11 13:11:32 +0000 UTC

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lenkite

How did he get balance ? We only saw rage and greed.

Nikodemus Siivola

I was looking forward to the hidden requirement being accidentally filled because Reivyn does something cool. Disappointed by the deux ex machina.

Enxes

So his dad's bloodline has to be similar to the prince's (from the abyss realm) for him to require balance between his Mom's bloodline being connected to Vynn. He might even be related to the Red Eye entity (although then it'd be weird for only Vynn to recognize the bloodline and for Red Eye not to.)

Robert Hinshaw

I’m getting whiplash over the lack of agency. The entire front end of the story was Reivyn getting more agency until he finally landed in a school type situation where he was excelling. But then he’s wrenched away and tossed around as a pawn again after we were assured of how powerful his parents were? That kind of twist needs more lead up, otherwise it just comes off as the author steering the character onto a new plot. I’m fine with his power inflation (especially since the world building suggests so many powerhouses out there), but the fact so many more powerful people can use him like a sock puppet takes a lot of the interest out of it for me. What’s the point of rooting for him when an Abyssal being sneezes and he loses?

Game Devil

Oh no, there's always a price believe me. Nothing comes for free, even if the price is as trivial as a few seconds of your time it is still a price to be paid. This is totally separate from a concept like karma of which I don't know if it exists or not. But a price for everything there is, even if some of the prices are paid by others and not by yourself.

Leonard Marchant

There isn't always a price, karma doesn't exist, it's just a saying. That's irl anyway, it seems karma is a real thing in the realms.

Kary_PL

Verdic realm can be considered morally good, with misery as a punishment for killing innocent people. Abyss is kind of evil. Mana is neutral and he was born in Verdic realm, so maybe by 'corrupting' part of his soul it is now in balance. Still we have to see how his personality will be impacted. Him just training and not getting levels and stats would be interesting. He could learn how to use Abyss mana properly and unlock Abyss' affinities. After returning he would be more competent in skills and mana department, but not in levels. That would allow some conflict, becouse otherwise he would soon become super OP as he start leveling

Lommel

> more internal conflict Oh god, please no.

DarthWaffles

I'm hoping this ends up with more internal conflict and relativity minor changes in external behavior. Beyond what is necessary after triggering the countdown to apocalypse. I'll keep reading regardless I trust you to do the story justice.

Tsula

Man I sure hope this doesn't change the MC too much, I signed up to read about a hardworking pumpkin. If I want to read about a greedy fella who has no problem stepping on bodies for personal power I'll catch back up on defiance of the fall.

alex bozdog

As it has been mentioned he will probably be stuck in the dungeon for a longer time than a couple months, giving his firends time to get power so they don't become dead weight to him, and this has to happen cause Revyn is so far ahead of the curve that if he ever fights someone his Tier he would win by default.

Kyfe

I think my foreshadowing wasn't nearly as light as a lot of people.are thinking: Mastermind of the Vynn Dungeon Breaks was chased to this Region. Chapter 41 has a big one. Reivyns entire goal of forcing a Tier 3 early is tied into it. The Dungeon was leaking Abyss mana, and it was denser lower down. The one's supposedly responsible for the break allude to a boss. The entire three major arcs center around the Revenant Dungeon All this to say we know he's around, we know he's interested in the Dungeon, we know there's more to it than meets the eye, and we know the Fate mechanics exist (it's in there, it didn't spring up from nowhere).

Drakken17

Aren't the past live he took in from when the soul was absorbing others at the start of it all? Maybe thats why his bloodline is different from his parents because the soul affected it

Kyfe

Yeah, that's the one.

Thaco4

You're thinking of Garrett PI and the foreshadowing stick is heavy in that series with multibook build up to any truly shattering reveals.

Kyfe

I prefer his series on the fantasy detective guy. Can't remember the name, but it has metals in their titles

Thaco4

Lmao! Yeah that guy. IMHO, the best way to deal with the whole chosen one (OP MC) is the prophecy foreshadowing stick. Robert Jordan used it with such expert level in the WoT series that nothing shocked readers it was just an ahHA moment. Most fantasy fans aren't here for twists that they didn't see coming. That is what the mystery genre is for. Sanderson tends to be pretty brutal with his foreshadowing stick. Another of my favorite authors, Glen Cook tends the write 1st person and his approach to foreshadowing is the character making an idle speculation or observing an out of character move for another of the characters... I'm going to go read Chronicles of the Black Company again because if you think about Glen Cook at all you have to reread him again. Memetic trap

Nick Nicholson

Dude wtf happened to this story.

Kyfe

The name rings a bell. He has like 1 short novella? Such a slow writer that he couldn't possibly have "accidentally" written 5 extra full novels during a year of lockdowns

Thaco4

A great podcast I listen to is 'Writing Excuses' with Howard Taylor and Brandon Sanderson. Howard Taylor is author of the web comic Schlock Mercenary a series that posted daily with not a day missed in like a decade and a half. And we all know who Sanderson is.... or you should if you enjoy the fantasy genre.

Thaco4

I love the Lightbringer series too. Brent Weeks uses his foreshadowing stick with expert level skill. Go back and read those first 2 books tho. That revel is foreshadowed pretty heavily so as not to overly spring out of character behavior on the reader. Consistently light taps vs one or two heavy hits.

Kyfe

Here's my reply (paraphrased, cause I didn't copy it, lol): I might he biased because of one of my favorite series: The Lightbringer series by Brent Weeks. The foreshadowing for the big reveal at the end of the second book was literally the title of the first book. And it was such a delight when all the pieces finally clicked.

Game Devil

Hmm, I have no idea what you're talking about, but I'm sure I'll find out later in the story. Thanks!

Thaco4

Okay to repost my comment then, luckily this is why I copy paste my comments before I post them... Everyone is being far too negative about this. Kyfe, keep up the great writing. I have to admit that while I haven't enjoyed these last few chapters much, they are well written. Yes, you could have forshadowed the abyssal BBG more obviously, alluded to him in a convo or statement by the cultists during the dungeon break. Something like "Our master waits at the gate." Subtle, yet accurate. Reivyn would be puzzled at the time and dismissed it but we, the reader, would have a nice and clear foreshadowing to this. Vague foreshadowing seems to peeve readers. Assume that the average reader has the intelligence of a 7th grader. Remember foreshadowing is the dummy stick, you got to beat the reader with it regularly or they get uppity that a twist wasn't foreseeable. When seriously, wtf did people expect about a big door in a dungeon spewing the bad mana all over and what would be behind it? I liked the interludes. Well written and show the depravity of the abyssal realm. Overall, I would say that this section has kept your typical flair. In all, keep up the good work. Maybe be a little more heavy handed with the foreshadowing stick in the future. Love the story and I'm intrigued by where you are going with this. Is Reivyn going to link both of the loose strings from those orbs on either side of the bridge to himself? Thereby getting a consistent stream of power from both realms so he is never out of alignment again and isn't suffering backlash when confronted with either types of mana? Anyways, TLDR -Good job. Use your foreshadowing stick more/harder. Speculation. See you next chapter.

Kyfe

That happened to me, too, and it's my page, lol. I have no idea

Thaco4

Umm what keeps happening to my comment? I saw Kyfe replied then come back to read it and it is gone...

Robert Apgar

Well that might be one possible way the gold line ruins peoples ability to ascend. It doesnt seem like you can take a T1 affinity to the peak.

Kyfe

Those aren't actually alternate lives. They're dreams induced by something, which Reivyn recognized.

Call0013

I guess the realms affinities only being tier 5 should have been a hint.(edit, I am only joking pretty sure they don’t have the gold thing because he has the affinity)

Robert Apgar

So my thinking is that there are obviously countless other realms with their own affinities, and Verdical and Abyss Realms have their golden tether cut. So either they broke away from a stronger influence or those two realms suck in some way according to xanxia. With this big emphasis on the two suck realms and white mask giving the MC motivation by saying crazy stuff that frankly he knew would be unappealing, probably white mask is hoping that Reivyn combines the abyss and verdical Bloodlines then systems/realms into one, maybe even being so OP he rethreads the golden tether. Honestly it's too early for the MC to be THAT important like how many trillions of people in each realm are there? And Reivyn is just going to be the best that no one ever was? The settings have rationalized away any way for other 11 year olds to be equal at this point. The only advantage left to them is higher mana density in the higher tier regions so maybe they can practice with mana easier?

Game Devil

P.S. I did like the "Always a Price" chapter just for the chapter title, that's what life is all about, there's always a price.

Game Devil

I gave in and started reading anyway, but too early it seems. This makes no sense to me, those lives are such caricatures. Guess the Abyss Realm is really about extremes, glad he didn't grow up there. For 4 of those lives to be included in the 8 he seemingly remembers next to his own can't be coincidence, so manipulation from before birth after all? Hope this arc ends soon, I don't like it very much, that's the disadvantage with reading loose chapters rather than a finished novel I guess, you can't just skip ahead.

Nathan Sto

I actually really liked the alternate lives but. They weee a cool interlude. Not sure about the power up, BUT I’m willing to wait and see how it goes. I literally paid money for this, obviously the authors already proved he can make a story Ienjoy.

SodaBoBomb

11 years old, perfectly balanced soul. And yes, I know it's from his past lives, but still, this is something he should've had to earn. Instead it's just handed to him. This is a power up that should've happened a few years from now AFTER he's at least gotten his forced Tier that he's been working towards. Especially since this will undoubtedly have something to do with his Tier 5 affinities. Those should have sat there as a mystery while he ranks up his normal 1-4 affinities until he can earn working with the Tier 5. That would also make it a good future powerup without negating the ones below it's usefulness. He was already OP. I feel like he's getting boosted too quickly, and without earning it. That said, I liked the sequence. Very creative little snippets of other lives


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