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Chapter 23 - Cult of Personality

🕑 Added 2022-05-05 05:28:28 +0000 UTC

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Kyfe

This has not come up in the story yet, but there's a reason. I don't want to put spoilers here, though.

Obran

Not sure how much I agree with the low charisma since he seems to be being groomed for being an officer. Can't really see a company mascot being at the level of "me strong, you stupid" charm.

Kyfe

The formatting for this site is different from Royal Road, and they're both different from my text program. I bold all internal thoughts and words used with emphasis in my text program, and it doesn't translate over to either site. Then I have to go in and find everything I bolded and make it italicized in RR, and I haven't had a chance to fiddle with it in Patreon enough to figure out how to do so on this site. If I can't do it, I'll use quotes for internal thoughts as well going into the future.

Mobious

While I'm enjoying the story so far, the abrupt shifts into first person internal thoughts in this chapter were a bit confusing at first. Perhaps changing the style of text(i.e. italics) or putting some punctuation similar to "thoughts" or -thoughts- would help differentiate the internal thoughts from the rest of the paragraph.


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