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[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death, extra scenes for chapter 159

Author's Note: Chapter 159 was originally two scenes longer than it is in current canon. Included for your amusement are the two additional scenes. They are not canon to Marked for Death, meaning they don't count and nothing in them should be relied upon.This was originally the second half of Chapter 159 before it got retconned due to lack of simulationism in the 'seals could Cthulhu' idea.---------------------------------------------Finding a proctor had proven to be relatively easy. Every five or ten minutes a jet of sparks wo...

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death - Chapter 159

Chapter 159: Third Options and Where to Find ThemNinja tended to want a bit more personal space than civilians—being constantly on watch for assassination had that effect on one. Deliberately or not (and Hazō had not the slightest doubt that it was deliberate), the proctors had crowded several hundred teenage ninja Exam entrants into a space small enough that everyone needed to be careful to avoid bumping shoulders with the stranger beside them. A ring of proctors kept anyone from spreading out while simultaneously shepherding this densely-p...

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death, Chapter 158

Another chapter by OliWhail. I have macronized it and done a few typographic touch-ups but it is otherwise as originally written.Chapter 158: Neapolitan Reunions"Is it really you?" Hazō asked. "Really really?"Hana loosened her grip. "Check for yourself.""Kai!" Hazō called out as he dispelled. Nothing changed.Hana pulled a kunai from a holster at her hip and made a swift cut across the back of one knuckle, holding up the wound for his inspection."We need to talk," declared Hazō.He set up the air dome ag...

[NonEarlyBird] Chapters 156.3, 157.1, 157.2 -- Marked for Death

These are short, so I'm lumping them together.------------Chapter 156.3: Information GatheringKurosawa Ren, the Fifth Mizukage of the Village Hidden in the Mist, smiled. There were far too many teeth showing for Hazō's comfort."At this point, it is traditional for the host Kage to announce what the events will be," she said, her voice carrying to the back of the crowd with the ease of a trained orator. "This year we're going to try something a little different."There are two core functions to the ninja life: combat ...

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death, Chapter 156.2: Commencement

Note:This chapter was written by the wonderful OliWhail. It has been macronized, formatted, a couple of typos have been fixed, and the footer section (XP award, voting time, etc) has been stripped. Other than that, it is shown as written.It's been a while since I posted an MfD chapter here, so a bit of a recap:The team is at the Chūnin Exams, which are being held in Hazō's original home village of Mist (the Village Hidden in the Mists). When they arrived they were assigned to barracks, where they quickly found that they were being spi...

[EarlyBird] Marked for Death, Chapter 156.2: Commencement

Note:This chapter was written by the wonderful OliWhail. It has been macronized, formatted, a couple of typos have been fixed, and the footer section (XP award, voting time, etc) has been stripped. Other than that, it is shown as written.It's been a while since I posted an MfD chapter here, so a bit of a recap:The team is at the Chūnin Exams, which are being held in Hazō's original home village of Mist (the Village Hidden in the Mists). When they arrived they were assigned to barracks, where they quickly found that they were being spi...

[NonEarlyBird] Chapter 53 - Dungeon Crawler You

Chapter 53: Bad JobsTaylor: I'm going to talk to them. Moose, fade back with stealth, get an ambush ready. Drew, smoke it up. Make it look like it's drifting towards them naturally. Leo, my dear little liar, back me up if I need it.Calliope: Yah, because you totally should be the one doing the talking instead of me, the one with all the Charisma and lying skills.Drew: Not now.Moose: MOOSE DOES NOT LIKE LEAVING YOU GUYS ALONE, BUT OKAY! HE DOES NOT THINK HE'S GOING TO BE VERY STEALTHY, THOUGH. NO WORRIES, MOOSE HAS GOT THIS.Moose, wh...

What should I be writing?

Hi folks! I'm looking for some feedback. Bear with me, this is going to be rambly.I've been having a lot of trouble writing for the last few months; I'm managing to maintain Marked for Death because I have so much momentum and an established audience, but working on other things has been too hard.I think maybe I'm getting past that; I got excited earlier today and did some note taking / basic outlining, but I'm not sure what the best thing to work on would be. I have a couple of ideas that I've been considering and I&...

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death Chapter 156.1

Note: This chapter was written by my illustrious and unfortunately erstwhile co-author OliWhail.Chapter 156.1: Boys and BlundersHazō's eyes were naturally drawn up to his old room in the barracks. A mental picture of the spartan accommodations came easily to mind ("IT BUILDS CHARACTER, YOU UNGRATEFUL MAGGOTS," he recalled hearing far too many times) and he idly hoped they would have been spruced up somewhat for the Exams.The crowd of Leaf nin — more than a dozen teams in all, and Hazō had never even seen the ones outside the &#3...

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death - Chapter 155

Chapter 155: You Can't Go Home AgainJiraiya paused, clearly weighing whether or not to finish the thought; when he spoke again the words were heavy and slow. "And, of course, I could always have killed you later if I had had to."The shiver was back in Hazō's spine and it had brought an entire pack of friends."My, what a nice salad!" Mari-sensei said, snatching up the salad bowl and giving it a practiced flick that made the contents jump out of the bowl and tumble back in, mixing them in the process. "So, who would l...

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death - Chapter 154

Chapter 154: Pragmatic Bargains"Would this be a good time for me to ask everyone's advice?" Keiko asked carefully. "Jiraiya, I feel certain that today, like every day as Hokage, has been stressful for you. I do not wish to—"Jiraiya smiled and raised a hand to cut her off. "Yes, it's been stressful, but it's fine. It's actually been one of the better days recently. How can I help?" He poured himself a fresh cup of tea and rolled the warm cup between his palms as he looked at her expectantly.Keiko paused,...

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death, Chapter 153

Chapter 153: Kagome versus the Seventh Path"Akatsuki, you say," Kagome said thoughtfully. "Well, what I know is—"He paused so as not to be interrupted by that weird gurgling screech that came from the bowels of the mansion every fifteen minutes between four and five pm. The Gōketsu Clan had long since decided that it must be malfunctioning pipes, and silently agreed that there was no need to go and investigate further."Akatsuki is a society of summoners," Kagome continued."What, all of them?" Noburi interrupte...

[NonEarlyBird] Jiraiya Revived, a Marked for Death omake

I got commissioned to write a piece about w

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Explanation, written for people with no context: I co-author a Naruto fanfic quest called Marked for Death. The events relevant to this short story go like this: Gōketsu Hazō is an extremely competent sealmaster (i.e. person who makes seals, which are paper-and-ink magic items) Hazō accidentally created a rift to the afterlife, but it soon closed He promptly started working on ways to reopen it so that he could resurrect his dead loved ones Akatsuki, a group of superninja terrorists, discovered the rift. Their sealmaster, Sasori, promptly st...

Psychological Horror: 'Crime Prevention'

One of the Marked for Death players commissioned me to write psychological horror. It took far too many attempts, but I finally came up with something I'm relatively pleased with.

[AllPatrons] DCY Chapter 49

My apologies everyone, I'm a doofus. I went and posted this directly to SV, announced it, and then realized that I should have sent it to earlybirds first. Because of the mistake I'm sending this to all patrons at the same time. I'll be sure not to do that with the upcoming chapter 50, and there there will be another Marked for Death archive coming out shortly, complete with commentary. That one will do the correct thing and go to earlybirds for 24 hours before going to all patrons.

[NonEarlyBird] DCY - Chapter 48

This update is going to be broken into a few chunks because otherwise it would be excessively large.

[NonEarlyBird] DCY Chapter 47

This went out to earlybirds yesterday and is go

[NonEarlyBird] DCY Character Sheets

As people hopefully know, I currently run two quests, Marked for Death and Dungeon Crawler You! DCY is my light and fluffy narrativist quest where there is (almost) no crunch and I can do Rule of Cool and Rule of Funny stuff if I want to. Despite that, I do actually have character sheets for the main characters. I've been holding off on releasing those sheets but this feels like a good time. Behold!DCY Character Sheets

[EarlyBird] DCY Character Sheets

As people hopefully know, I currently run two quests, Marked for Death and Dungeon Crawler You! DCY is my light and fluffy narrativist quest where there is (almost) no crunch and I can do Rule of Cool and Rule of Funny stuff if I want to. Despite that, I do actually have character sheets for the main characters. I've been holding off on releasing those sheets but this feels like a good time. Behold!DCY Character Sheets

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death Chapter 152.2

A blast from the past, back when Hazō's Alertness was competitive with that of his cohort. :>

[NonEarlyBird] DCY Chapter 0-45

Greetings, all! Attached is a zip file containing all of Dungeon Crawler You! from chapter 0 to chapter 45 (the most recent and currently unpublished one). I'm including the zip file link but not pasting the text into this post because at 23,677 lines and 1.8M of text it would absolutely melt my browser.Enjoy.

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death - Chapter 152.1

Badassery! Combat! The kids being awesome! Huzzah!

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death - Chapter 151

Commentary and non-commentary versions attached. ch152 goes out to earlybirds tomorrow and all patrons the day after

[NonEarlyBird] Wherefore Hagoromo Bigotry

This short story might only make sense to Marked for Death players, so if it isn't clear then please let me know.It's the first half of a commission from Noumero, who wanted some psychological horror. It provides the answer to a question that multiple players have asked: how did someone as politically idiotic as Ritsuo end up the head of a major clan like the Hagoromo?Let me know what you think.

[NonEarlyBird] Chapter 150 - Marked for Death

Chapter 150, in various formats. I've added a new 'spoiler' tag to the HTML in the commentary. It seems like it didn't come through in the PDF version of the commentary and I'm not sure if it works in all ebook readers. Let me know if it's an issue.

[AllPatrons] Dungeon Crawler You - Chapters 1-4

"Dungeon Crawler You" (aka DCY) is my new quest that runs in the same multiverse as Dungeon Crawler Carl (DCC) and my fanfic of it, Dungeon Crawler Katia (DCK). As with all quests, I publish a chapter and then the readers get to vote on what the main characters should do next.As of July 1, 2022, chapters 1-3 of DCY are up on SufficientVelocity at https://forums.sufficientvelocity.com/threads/dungeon-crawler-you.105191/ . Content usually goes out to EarlyBirds first, then to regular patrons, then to the general public. Given that DCY is ...

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death: Toad Counseling

The Discord user NotAGazpacho commissioned me to write a piece about Ma and Pa Toad offering relationship counseling to Yuno and Noburi. I would have canonized it except that Noburi doesn't have enough chakra to summon both of them and that was a requirement of the commission. I hope you enjoy.

[NonEarlyBird] Marked for Death - Minato's Poetry Part 6

The final installment (unless someone hires me to make more, although I'll be charging a lot more next time because this was exhausting) of the Fourth Hokage's bad poetry.